First of all, for me making movies is a tremendously fun experience. However, I want to make my movie to help students who may be facing certain struggles their first semester of college, as I am facing them myself at times. The tittle of my film is
“Assembly Line Student”. As the tittle implies the film is about this student who would wake up to this frantic alarm, wear the same clothe everyday, do the same things every day, to an exaggerated degree. He would wake up, get dressed, walk to class, sit down take the class, eat, take more classes, study and go to sleep. He would barely have any type of interaction and when confronted with any social interaction he would not be able to react, being stuck in this type of wormhole routine (the routine is comedy based, although it’s a very serious topic). Not even his roommate would be able to snap him out of it. As the protagonist is studying (first person point of view doing homework,), a voice is heard in the background: “hey man, want to go play some soccer?” (Camera angle changes, showing the protagonist’s back and the roommate) the protagonist responds very unenthusiastically: “Can’t, I have to study now, it’s on my planner”, “Ok, good luck. See you later” (roommate leaves). The roommate would become worried, as he knows his roommate is falling into a routine that was depressing, as he saw him lose emotion and happiness every passing day. He would organize an intervention with some friends. The dialogue is still not planned out, but they would speak about his routine and how it affects him and worries each of them. At first he would be in denial, but at the end of the dialogue after showing various types of testimonies of his behavior and how it’s not healthy for him, he says he will think about it (Highlight of key shot: Camera angle here goes through each of the friends and switches to the protagonist, in the end it zooms in until he responds: “Thanks for worrying about me, I’ll think about everything that you have said”). The end would show the protagonist in his room doing homework with his planner to his side, in the planner it can be read marked in red: “STUDY!” (The camera angle shows him looking at his roommate’s soccer ball, he sighs and the screen fades into black). What is shown later is the protagonist going up to his roommate who was in the lounge and asking: “Want to kick the ball around for a while?” the roommate responds: “Sure! Let’s Go”. Both walk out of the scene (camera angle from behind following them, credits appear).
I like the story and your purpose of it because I think it's something that many people at Emory struggle with due to all the work that's assigned. I also like your title! My suggestion would be to make names for all the characters and edit the spelling in your pitch. Also, specify how you will show his happiness fading.
This is definitely a relatable story for all freshman and a great idea for a film! The only thing I would suggest is to add a little bit more of a conclusion, like showing him having more balance between academics and social life in different ways.
I want to make this film to show the struggles of having a long distance relationship in college. The story begins with the main character, Mary, who just got accepted into the college of her dreams, Emory University. She is presented with numerous activities when she arrives, but in unsure which to choose. Her boyfriend back home, Jake, encourages her to explore her options, but she is afraid of not spending enough time with him. Each night they talk on the phone, and over the weekends they get on Skype and watch Netflix shows together. Mary often lays in bed after they get off the phone, deep in thought, saying to herself, “all I want is to enjoy my college experience, without being held back…”
As Mary becomes more involved around campus, she becomes close friends with a new guy, Mike. They begin to spend more time together, getting lunch and joining clubs, and Mike begins to develop strong feelings towards Mary. Although Mary is oblivious to his feelings, her best friend, Jane, is clued in. Jane constantly watches Mike, making sure he does not ruin the relationship that Jake and Mary share. However, Mike begins to resent Jane for trying to keep Mary away from him, and evens goes so far as to try to ruin their friendship. All the while, Jake is in the shadow of Mary and Mike’s new “friendship.” Until one day, when Jake is scrolling through Mary’s Facebook. He pauses and notices new pictures she posted. He stares blankly at the screen. They are pictures of her and Mike together. “Who is that guy?” he asks, angrily.
After Jake confronts Mary about Mike, she gets really defensive. She does not want to hurt Jake, but at the same time does not want to continue their relationship. Her constant worry about making Jake happy is getting in the way of her own happiness, that of enjoying her friendships and focusing on studies in college. Mary runs over to go to Mike’s dorm for advice, not knowing of Mike’s true feelings towards her. After asking Mike what she should do, he convinces her to call it off with Jake. When Jane finds out about this, she tells Mary the truth about Mike’s feelings for her. More confused than ever, Mary decides to tell Jake the truth. She breaks up with her boyfriend, and decides to see less of Mike as well. “It’s time for me to enjoy my college experience, not worry about relationships,” Mary says with relief.
I really like your story because I think it's something that a lot of people go through in college and it's different than the usual stories about getting out of the box or roommate problems. I would suggest specifying how Mike tries to ruin the friendship between Jane and Mary. Also, you should revise this sentence: "Her constant worry about making Jake happy is getting in the way of her own happiness, that of enjoying her friendships and focusing on studies in college. " Other than that, looks good!
I agree with Sammie. This looks really good and the story is something I think a lot of people can relate to. Maybe try to add some key shots for the film as well. I think this could be very helpful.
I feel that this topic is incredibly relatable to many freshman. Does Jane ever tell Mary about Mike? Why doesn't she if she is so concerned?
It's a very interesting story especially the ending part. But why didn't Mary tell Jake about her new friends in college? And why wouldn't Mary go to Jane for advice since they were bff?
I really like your topic about the long distance relationship! Actually at first I also wanted to write a script about how the long distance relationship goes on in college, but finally I decided to touch another topic. Your story is very engaging. And there are many twists in the story. However, if I wrote a story like this, I might have written a different ending that Mary and Jack are still together after experiencing all those things, because I think it is unnecessary to break up with each other due to that kind of trouble. Pure and faithful love needs to be taken care of by both sides in a relationship. They can communicate more to keep the relationship healthy. And then this story may give those people who is experiencing long distance relationship confidence and encouragement. But this is just my opinion. The ending you've written is also instructive and intriguing.
Your story is so interesting and compelling and I love the ending! But I do agree with Charlie that if Mary and Jane are really good friends, she would definitely go to Jane for help and advice.
Due to the fact that everyone in our class and our college (and most likely other colleges) can relate to the competition, struggles and triumphs of enrolling in classes before the semester starts, I thought creating a movie about Opus and enrolling would be a fun story that everyone can relate to and appreciate. In High School students were able to get into any class desired, however, in college, it is not an easy and friendly affair, rather it is a challenge, every man for themselves type of affair. Before the enrollment times begin, people tend to create mock schedules for the classes, teachers, and times that would maximize personal happiness. Before the enrolment times, people are eager and excited, but then once enrolling commences, everything changes. It’s a blood bath. Well, not literally, but metaphorically. Everyone is out for his or her own personal gain, whether it is stalking Opus at 3 in the morning or distracting friends. As a freshman, you do not really understand what is going to happen nor are you ready for the turmoil and uneasiness that arises. Fortunately, in the end, most things work out and you laugh about what had transpired.
In my story, the beginning would comprise of a SA explaining to a couple of freshman how Opus works and what to expect. But the freshmen ignore the SA and build mock schedules. The freshmen are excited to wake up for their enrollment times and go to bed. The next morning, one freshman oversleeps 30 minutes past their enrollment time! All flustered he manages to enroll in two classes that satisfy the 8-credit max for first enrollment. However come second enrolment time, nothing is open except for health and pace. After stalking Opus rigorously for days, he still cannot breach the 12-credit minimum and is not considered a full time student during “add, drop, swap”. Then comes the climax of the story. A week after the initial enrollment day, the not full time freshman and his friend are together in a room. Both want to enroll in a calculus class to fulfill their calculus pre requisite course for the B-School. Then the friend screams, “Calculus is open”! But because the friend is enrolled in another, undesirable calculus time, she cannot get the new calculus course so he steals it, screams in excitement, and storms out of the room. Then he goes to his SAs because he feels bad about what transpired. He feels he has done something morally unacceptable, but the SAs remind him that it is the Opus games and it’s every man for himself.
If someone could help me and suggest a satisfying ending to this story, I would greatly appreciate it.
You could end it by having the friend get into a good calculus class anyway and say that the moral of the movie is that eventually most freshmen get into the classes they want to during add/drop/swap even though it is very stressful and competitive. I know that most of my friends, along with myself, faced similar situations and it would have been reassuring to know that eventually it does all work out.
I love your storyline! The line where the SA says that it is the Opus games and it's every man for himself is really funny. I like the action that you put into your pitch, especially when you said "Calculus is open!" The only thing I would suggest is adding some more dialogue.
I want to make a film that depicts the class diversity there is at college. It begins with Lexi and Hannah two freshman girls arriving at the dorm to meet each other for the first time. Both Lexi and Hannah were assigned to be each other’s roommate randomly. Lexi comes from the upper east side of NYC and Hannah comes from a small town in Kentucky, both very different backgrounds. On move-in day Lexi arrives with both her parents and two of her help to help her unpack. When she first arrives Hannah is already settled in. Hannah has not even a tenth of the amount of clothing that Lexi brought. When Lexi walks in she screams out of shock of how small the dorm room is. The next scene will take place at the DUC: the dinning room. Both Hannah and Lexi will be sitting at a table, Hannah will be eating her food, enjoying it, on the contrary Lexi will take one bite of the food and spit it out, she will complain the entire meal about how awful the food is, how she could never eat this disgusting food and how she is going to be going out to restaurants every meal. The next scene will take place in the laundry room. Hannah will be doing her laundry mundanely, while Lexi has not a clue what to do. She is baffled that there are no maids in college and can not fathom the fact that she must do her own laundry. The next day both Lexi and Hannah are in their dorm together and Lexi is just talking about all the negative things about college and going off and off about how she should never have went away to college and how she misses being home and her previous life. After listening to Lexi whine for two days, Hannah bursts. Hannah tells Lexi how not everyone is as fortunate financially, as for most people going away to college, especially a private university such as Emory is a privilege not a right. She tells Lexi that she is fortunate to be given this amazing opportunity, and that Lexi isn’t giving anything a chance. After awkward silence, Lexi walks out of the dorm. She is then shown in the study lounge thinking. He thoughts are about how maybe I’m not giving college a fair chance. Maybe I am jumping to conclusions. I guess it could be a lot worst. She then walks back in to the dorm and apologies to Hannah. Hannah explains how she also is sorry; she defends Lexi’s actions telling her that this is a huge transition for her coming from a very wealthy dependent lifestyle to being very independent. Hannah promises to guide Lexi and assist her.
I think you have a really good idea for a storyline here. You have really thought out your scenes and how it will play out. Maybe try to add some more specific shots and angles you will use throughout the film now that you have the basic plot all figured out. How can you portray these scenes the most effectively? Also, try to include some key quotes instead of just summarizing what they are talking about. Great start!
Thanks! Yes definitely going to do all those things!
I think this is a phenomenal topic and is something that affects many people at this very diverse university. I think it would be interesting if you added Lexi insulting Hannah at the way she lives/behaves. Tremendous start!
I am thinking of composing a movie about the struggles female roommates may encounter during college life. This topic is interesting to me because I currently live in a single and do not have to worry about the hardships of living with another person, especially someone that I do not know. I have heard stories from my friends about the disgusting things their roommates do, and I thought it would be helpful to create a video that shows students what types of things they could be more considerate about in their rooms. Hopefully after viewing this movie or reading my screenplay, roommates who have disagreements will be able to communicate more effectively and have more success compromising on a solution.
The movie will most likely begin by introducing the two girls to each other on move-in day. One roommate is a complete jock who likes to go to sleep early so she has energy for her hard practices, and the other roommate is a hardcore party girl who likes to stay out late with her friends. When they first meet, they immediately can tell that they do not have a lot in common. The jock is very organized and has to manage her time wisely to balance all of her school work and athletics. The party girl is very messy and spontaneous with her plans. The two girls’ different styles cause tension between them, but they do not want to be rude or mean to the person they will be living with for the next year, so they both put on fake smiles around each other and act like friends.
However, when they are not around each other all they do is talk behind their roommates back to their friends. There will be multiple shots going back and forth from girl to girl with them complaining about little idiosyncrasies they dislike about each other. The issues will be about bedtimes, music preferences, playing music while studying, eating in the room/eating the other persons food, leaving toothpaste in the sink, leaving clothes on the floor, borrowing clothes/shoes without asking, and many other small things that should not be a big deal and are easily fixable through communication.
Eventually, one roommate does something (I am not sure what yet… any ideas?) that makes the other roommate snap. She starts yelling all of the annoying things she has lived with and says she cannot deal with it anymore. The other roommate is offended and responds with more shouts of discontent with their current situation. They finally communicate with each other about the issues they have been facing, and they realize the other girl would have been willing to change if she knew she was being annoying. After they have their yelling match, they have a serious conversation and begin to make progress toward compromise. The end of the movie will have them as closer friends who do not feel the need to gossip about each other to their friends.
I really think you thought of a great and realistic movie idea that every college student (with a roommate) can relate. It is a reality many live through but do not always address. In terms of what makes one of the roommates snap I have an idea. When one of the roommates is gossiping to her friends, the other walks by and hears. Then instantly the one who walks by and hears snaps and starts the confrontation/yelling match. Then slowly the friends walk away and it's just the two roommates. Just a thought, but I truly love this movie pitch
Yes!! I really like that idea! They could just be in the DUC or something and not realize the roommate is sitting at the table behind her. That is a good idea. Thank you!
Maybe the jockey roommate can have a midterm on friday and spend the entire week trying to study, but every time she sits down to study something the roommate does is distracting. For example, maybe playing music or talking on the phone. Already annoyed, the party girl roommate can bring back friends after going out on a thursday night at 3am or some ridiculous time. The jock roommate then due to getting no sleep thursday night can oversleep and miss her mid-term.
That would definitely cause a roommate to snap! I like this idea and I will consider it when writing my screenplay. Thank you!
I wanted to write a movie about the struggles of having suitemates because many of my friends and I are in semi suites, so our roommates and we share a bathroom with 2 other people in the next room. The struggle between suitemates is different than the struggle between roommates because you aren’t living together, but rather just using a same commodity. The beginning of my movie starts off with Stacy, the main character, being excited to go to college. She is nervous to meet her roommate and to see how she will get along with her, but it does not cross her how she will get along with her suitemates because she technically isn’t living in the same room with them. She is just excited to meet them. There will be a shot that zooms into Stacy’s face of her walking into Longstreet Means Hall with a suitcase and thinking about all this. Next, Stacy meets her roommate, Michaela, for the first time in her new room while she is unpacking, and finds that they get along really well. On the other hand, when Stacy meets Tara for the first time, Tara is very standoffish and just asks for tape, instead of introducing herself. Stacy and Michaela go to Target to buy bathroom cleaning supplies and a rack for their toiletries. Stacy creates a color-coded schedule of when each set of roommates should clean the bathroom and tapes it on the bathroom door. They were to switch off cleaning the bathroom each weekend. Stacy and Michaela clean the bathroom the first week, but Tara and Cassandra don’t clean the bathroom the second week. Stacy is a very clean, organized person, who likes to be in control of things, but doesn’t like confrontation and wants to give a good impression on her suitemates since they just met and will be living next to each other for the whole year. However, the bathroom is growing filthy throughout the week that the suitemates did not clean it and Tara is very loud when she’s with friends, laughing, talking, and playing music. Stacy feels like Tara is always loud at the most inconvenient times, such as when she is studying or trying to sleep. There will be a close up shot that tours the bathroom and all the filth that is forming, including hair that’s on the walls of the shower, toilet paper and mud that are on the floor, and spilled shampoo and soap everywhere. Then, there will be a scene of Stacy tossing and turning in bed and banging on the wall between her and her suitemates’ room while music is blaring from their room. Stacy blows up one day when she slips and falls in the gross bathroom and Tara is yelling with her friends and blasting music on a Wednesday night. She fights with Tara about how inconsiderate she’s being and how she’s being filthy and such a bad suitemate. Tara denies everything and calls Stacy crazy and psycho. Stacy runs to her bed crying, but the next day Tara comes into Stacy’s room with Stacy’s favorite dessert, apologizes, and they make up. They make a bathroom schedule together that works better for each person and Tara promises to be quieter. The scene fades out with them laughing together.
I really liked your story. You may want to add some more about the second suite mate (Cassandra).
You have some very detailed ideas here. The only thing you might want to consider changing is the ending. Instead of the conventional happy ending, you might want to consider making it more dramatic and unexpected.
For me, one of the most significant changes in my freshmen year experience is to be away from parents and from home. Attending college means stepping out of comfort zones and being completely independence. I want to make a movie about the change in relationship of a freshman at Emory, Jenny, and her mom.
The first scene will take place at an airport or a bus station where Jenny and her mom say goodbye to each other. Jenny, feeling both excited and scared, is heading off to her new college life and her mother is worried about her. Lines such as, “take good care of yourself” and “stay healthy”, will be mainly exaggerated. The emotion of both characters, Jenny and her mom, will also be exaggerated by providing the inner thoughts of both characters.
After Jenny goes to Emory and starts her college life, she cannot live without her mom at first. She and her mom talks frequently on the phones and skype every night. Her mom called her by phone to wake her up in the morning, and called her at night to force her to sleep. Through the course selection process, Jenny rarely talked to the any professors or upperclassman to discuss her future courses. Rather, she only consults with her mom. As a result, as everybody else is getting used to the new environment and starts to enjoy life without family, Jenny stays the same. Her best friend from high school, Betty, tells her that what she does is not helpful to her college experience, but Jenny does not listen. To illustrate this idea, I may use several scenes that shows how Jenny has isolated herself from the normal crowd of students, and how much time she spends with her mom. For example, when Jenny is eating at DUC, other girls sit together and talk actively about their fun experiences, while Jenny stays on her phone and talks only to her mom.
However, since Jenny is not a high school kid anymore and her mom is way too far from her, Jenny and her mom have a big conflict over the phone. The conflict may be how many clubs Jenny should go at night, or whether Jenny should rush for a sorority or not. This shows that Jenny’s perceptions and horizons about life, although not changed much, has been influenced by the new life, and she is about to make some change, while her mom is not. As time goes by, Jenny finds difficulties communicating with her mom. Because she did not have many friends, she now feels very lonely.
Her only friend from high school, Betty, showed up again. She is by far the only friend of Jenny and she tells Jenny to stop relying on her family and on her mom anymore. Betty uses her own stories, such as knowing friends at the volunteer emory programs, attending alternative breaks and making valuable friends, and communicating upperclassmen and getting useful tips, to tell Jenny the benefit of reaching out and becoming independence. Jenny starts to change.
According to Betty’s advice, Jenny changes and becomes more connected with students of her own school year. Jenny and her mom’s relationship, instead of getting worse, actually strengthens because now Jenny becomes a happier person and her mom feels great about her. Although Jenny still misses her mom and her family frequently, she also feels that becoming more independence and more connected to the emory community is very beneficial for her. The last scene would be Jenny tries to run for the position of freshmen representative in one of the class at Emory. After trying hard, she gets the position and immediately phones her mom to tell her about the big news. However, her mom does not pick up the phone. Instead, her mom texts Jenny, “Congratulations my dear. So glad you made it! Go and enjoy your college life!” Then scene fades out with Jenny smiling as she looks at the message.
I really like your pitch! I think the message is very relatable, and you did an excellent job at portraying the plot. I love how you used actual quotations that you will use in the film; it really helped give a good representation of your character's traits.
I like this idea because it really raises a good point. And I also like the way that you described it so detailed and made it like real scenes. Also for the last scene how about also showing Jenny celebrating with her friends while texting her mom?
Why do I want to make a movie about the tour of a prospective student and all the emotions that are swirling around in their head? For anyone who seriously is considering attending a top twenty university and for that matter any university, then they would understand the emotions and competitiveness that goes along with it. Ever since the first day I had a college meeting to the day I got into Emory early decision I had angst and nerves everyday about the process. On the college tour you feel like you want to make a lasting impression, but in reality you can’t do that since around forty thousand kids are trying to do the same thing. All you can think about is the grades, the competition, the extra curricular activities you have, and the other kids on your tour and there resume. I want to explore these emotions since practically everyone applying to college has them and try and relive the feelings I had on my tour as well as many of my peers.
There are a few scenes that I clearly vision having in my movie. The first is when the tour guide begins talking about the average grades and SAT scores to get into Emory as well as the rank. Then the main characters mind will swirl with emotion on whether enough they are qualified. The next scene is at the beginning of the tour when your scouting out the competition. Finding kids who look like you and can sense are from the Northeast for instance, and are the ones who you will be competing for your spot with. Of course this is not true, but in there mind there trying to picture the other prospective students credentials and compare. I have not yet decided whether these shots will take place while talking to a parent or in the mind of the student but it will be either or.
I am not really clear on what my beginning, middle, and end will be yet. I have a broad idea but do not have much structure but here is what I am thinking. I want to start with a perspective student researching schools or sitting with a college councilor. They search Emory because of all the great things they have heard from peers but see the credentials of the average student and realize it is a reach. However, they decide to take a trip down anyway. They take a tour of the campus and as I said before the prospective student is nervous. He knows it is a reach and letting all the college stuff get to his head. Despite that, he loves Emory, and believes he wants to apply early decision. Then comes the ending, but here is where I am having trouble. I don’t have many great ideas and could use some feedback.
I think this sounds like a very interesting topic and am looking forward to seeing how it turns out. I like the idea of the student thinking nervously to himself about grades. Having a voice over of his thoughts is unique and intriguing. For your ending, it might be interesting having the student open his acceptance/rejection letter from Emory and either confirm or deny his doubtful thoughts about getting into his reach school. If he does apply ED, then maybe you could have him be deferred, thus confirming his doubts, but then be accepted during regular decision, denying them. The college application process is definitely an emotional roller-coaster and I think capturing those emotions in your movie will make it more engaging to the audience.
I really like your idea because anyone who has been on a college tour will be able to relate. The only advice that comes to mind: make sure to portray the stress that comes along with a college campus tour, as I believe that will make it very relatable to your audience.
My movie’s title is F.O.B which is an acronym for Fresh Off the Boat. The word FOB is used for mostly international students who are not used to the American culture. Most of the international students have a hard time trying to adjust to the American culture, and many of them are called FOBs. The movie will reach in to the difficult moments the international students have and try to advise them to get use to the American culture. The beginning of the movie will start with an international student coming to Emory and meeting an American roommate. The movie will start with comedy and end with comedy. When the international student meets an American roommate they try to have a nice conversation but an awkward mood feels up the room. For example, American roommate tries to give an ‘American greeting’ with a high five or fist bump but the international students would think he is punching him or something. The middle part of the script will consist of other cultural shocks or difficult times trying to follow the American culture. The main character tries new things in order for him to fit in. For example, he would dress up like a athlete with basketball jerseys or football jerseys and try to act cool with different accents. Later he would realize that it is not working and he made the situation much awkward. One more example is the tip culture here in America, where the international student is confused and tries to argue why he has to pay more than his meal. He finally gets called a FOB and doesn’t know what the meaning is. He tries to Google it and finds out the meaning. After all the struggles he has to face, he gives up and hangs out with people from his own country. He finally identifies himself as a FOB, BUT a friend starts giving him advices. The friend is a guy who also moved from his own country to America during his teenage years. He starts giving advices to him and tries to shadow the international student to help him out. At the end of the story, however, the international student concludes that he is a FOB and is proud with his own cultural identity. He finally finds out how to mingle all the different culture and 2 years later he helps another international student who is identified as a FOB.
I like the pitch. The constructive question I have is is there any underlying goal that the international student is trying to achieve.
I like your story about international student's struggles to survive in freshmen year, and I think it will be an interesting topic to talk about. What I really like about your pitch is that it looks very true. Instead of having that student totally convert to the image of a American college student, he becomes more confident in himself and proud of his own cultural identity. I think the ending is very good.
I really like your idea I can actually visualize the fist bump scene happening. Its just a suggestion but maybe you can cut down on the ending and make it a bit better. Overall I love the script.
For my movie, I’d like to create something that is beneficial to students not only at Emory, but also all over the world. The movie will be about students that are struggling with time management, adjusting to college, and how they face and tackle such problems. The title of the movie will be “Struggling Students.”
The story line will begin with a student named Jordan, that’s just coming into college, is excited, and signing up for many clubs and classes. Two weeks since Jordan’s started college, he is now in six clubs and is taking eighteen credit hours. He is a part of the Soccer Team, Mock Trail, Model UN, Volunteer Emory, writes for the Emory Wheel, and has his own radio show. He’s taking very difficult classes such as multivariable calculus and freshman organic chemistry. Did I mention? He also has a job at the CDC. He tries to stay focused on his studies but his roommate loves to go out and party. Whenever his roommate says “Hey, I’m going out, want to come?!,” Jordan thinks about all the work he has to do, but really wants to take a break from everything and have fun, “Sure! Let’s go.” After a couple of weeks, Jordan is starting to sacrifice sleep to be able to handle everything that he’s doing. Because he’s so tired, Jordan snoozes his raging alarm clock and sleeps through classes. He tries to study in the study lounge, but keeps getting distracted by his friends. By midterms week, he’s trying to handle everything that’s going on, but doesn’t get a chance to study much. A week later, he gets his grades back and finds that he’s failed 2/3 midterms that he’s taken.
Jordan then goes into depression and begins to binge drink. His roommate notices his problem and brings his friends in for an intervention. His friends help him realize that he should take things a little slower, and drop some of the things that he’s a part of to get back in control of his life. They make him a tentative schedule of what he should do to manage his time better. Jordan takes his friends’ advice and now and has more time to focus on school and have a healthy lifestyle, by managing his time better. (Scene cuts to Jordan writing emails of resignation, studying at the stacks, and looking at his schedule to see what he needs to do next). The last part of the movie shows Jordan at the end of the semester after acing all his finals, being involved in a few clubs, and having a healthy lifestyle.
I like your plot and idea, but to make your story a little more complex and give another twist to the story, you can have the kids parents insist that their son not give up any of the extra-curriculars.
Why make this movie? Freshman year of college is a big adjusting period during a student’s life. One of the biggest adjustments comes with getting acclimated to college teaching and grading. For most students, the style of teaching and grading in college is very different from what the style they received while in high school. One key difference between the two is the numbers of grades you receive. In high school, your grade in a course is a lot more rigid. This is because there is a much higher quantity of graded assignments. One bad grade will probably not even dent your grade in the course.In college, it is not out of place for your whole semester grade to only consist of 3 tests and a final . This situation places a high importance of each of the few graded assignments you may receive for the semester. With this high level of importance also comes a high level of stress. Additionally, majority of college students of achieved a high level of academic success their whole life. Receiving a bad test grade can be foreign territory for some. My goal of the movie is to represent the idea that one bad grade will not ruin a semester and definitely will not ruin your college career.
Main conflict: A high achieving incoming freshman, Mr. 4.0, wants to apply for highly regarded internship but needs to make a 3.75 this semester to do so. Mr. 4.0 has experienced academic success his whole life but his college academic career starts off pretty bumpy. He eventually begins to stress and begins doubting his academic future.
Beginning: Relative time frame is beginning of semester. Mr.4.0 just got finished with first round of test. Introduce main character and side character. Side character not developed yet. Ideally, someone who keeps Mr. 4.0 level headed.
Middle: Either second test with slight improvement or phone call home if 5 minute time limit can’t be reached. Second test would have Mr. 4.0 better prepared but still not making the best of his academic resources. Phone call home would be an overly dramatic phone call home to mom.
End: Receives high enough marks to apply for internship.
Key Quotes: TBD
Key Scenes: Phone call home discussing grades, introduction of Mr. 4.0
I see that you haven't completed your screenplay yet, but I really like your idea. I can definitely relate to this story very well and can't wait to see it. I think you're going to need to add specifics for anyone to further critique it.
I think this is a really interesting and engaging plot, and would make for an entertaining film. However, I think it may be a bit complex for a five-minute time period. You may want/need to simplify it a little to ensure that it tells a complete story without it seeming like the plot action rushed.
I wanted to create a movie that was relatable to my audience and exciting to watch. This is why I chose to write about a college student’s worst day ever. This movie is meant to give us all a little bit of perspective on how stressful situations can help us learn to stay positive and not get bogged down by school.
The beginning of my story starts with my main character Ellen, staying up late studying. She then goes to bed and sleeps through her alarm, having no time for breakfast or a shower before she heads to class. She arrives in class and her teacher asks for her paper that she completely forgot about bringing from LSM, even though she has been up all night typing it. Next she goes to receive her grade in her English class where she gets her project grade back, an F. After that she goes to the DUC and none of her friends are there to eat with her. She goes back to Longstreet to check on her OPUS about switching classes during add drop swap. OPUS is down and when it comes back up again, all of the classes she wanted to take are full. Until then, she didn’t feel like her day was going too bad, but all of a sudden the stress hits her and she decides to take a nap since she is exhausted from staying up so late. She wakes up a few hours later and goes outside to start studying when she sees her friend that she was supposed to meet for coffee when she was napping. She had completely forgotten and feels like a horrible friend. Her friend is incredibly understanding and doesn’t mind that she had missed coffee. Ellen spills about her day to her friend and then she feels better after realizing it could have been much worse.
When I want to express her emotions, I will do some extreme close-ups to highlight how sad she is and when she feels lonely, I will zoom out a lot. One example of this will be… zoom in, Ellen’s face starts to change from stable to sad, she starts to break down, zoom out, Ellen’s friend enters the frame to comfort her and Ellen starts to feel better. This idea is very simple, but I am hoping that through making the script more detailed I can make it more interesting and dynamic.
I do believe you will make the shots very well when you try to show the your protagonist's emotions. But I think the ending can be more expanded, like on the second day Ellen has got the campus job she previously applied for or the man she has a crush on invites her to have dinner...That may make the story more dramatic.
I think that you have some solid ideas here. The only thing that I would expand upon is the resolution at the end. I think that emphasizing why Ellen realizes that her day is not so bad after all is important. It can give the audience a new perspective on their own experiences and help them stay positive.
I want to make this movie because recently my bike was stolen outside my dorm during Fall Break and I have been fantasizing about rediscovering it somewhere on campus.
It’s 9:45 and my alarm clock continues to buzz. (BEEP BEEP BEEP…) Ethan has pressed the snooze button countless times, but he’s yet to wake up. Finally, at 9:55 Ethan jumps out of bed. He quickly realizes that today is Wednesday and he has an important biology class at 10 AM. He throws on a pair of pants, grab my bag, and bolt out the door. Ethan looks for my bike that he locked on the rack, but it is nowhere to be found. He starts to panic and continues to waste more time looking for the bike instead of getting to class on time. Ethan realizes that there’s no point in searching for my bike and he sprints across the bridge to my biology class.
Ethan is 10-15 minutes late and bursts through the door, breathing heavily. The professor looks at him in disappointment and asks, “Why are you so late?”
Ethan replies, “Sorry, I couldn’t find my bike this morning to get to your class on time.”
“This is not high school, Mr. Arbiser. Being late to my class will hurt your participation grade.”
Ethan sits down and don’t even think about what my professor says; all he can think about is where his bike could possibly be. The class feels like an eternity. The class is dismissed and Ethan quickly paces back to my dorm.
Ethan enters his dorm and knocks on the dorm of one of his friends to see if he might have used my bike or knows where it is. He opens his door and Ethan quickly enters his room and asked if he’s seen my bike recently. He hasn’t. Ethan asks him if he can help him look for it around campus and we run around the campus checking all the bike racks and popular areas on campus. Several hours pass, but still no luck. Finally, he suggests that Ethan should file an Emory police report. In the lawn of his dorm, Ethan dials the number and talk with the police consultant. A police car arrives and asks him what his bike looks like, where he locked it, and various other questions.
Days later, Ethan is still down about the tragic loss of my bike. Now, he is waking up much earlier for my classes because he doesn’t have a rapid transportation to class. Finally, Ethan receives a phone call from EPD asking him to meet them in a designated area soon. Ethan quickly walks to the area where a cop car is located. Behind the car they reveal my stole bike! He is ecstatic! Ethan hugs the officers and thanks them for their help many times. He hops on my beloved bike and instead of doing his homework, Ethan rides it throughout the night around campus.
hope you end up finding your bike. I like the story. What genre are you going for? Maybe a slight twist to make it less sad to happy.
I have decided to write about college for freshman that have grown up in a strict, sheltered environment but are abruptly given total freedom upon arriving at college.
Cameron Jones is packing his final belongings before leaving to Emory University. He is dealing with a myriad of emotions and has no earthly idea of what to expect at college. His father walks in and immediately Cameron rises. His father is an Army sergeant and has put Cameron through stringent discipline while raising him. Cameron has immense respect for his father but at times he lacks confidence to speak up for himself. Cameron's father speaks of how proud he is of his son. He also says that he better not screw up in college.
Upon reaching Emory, Cameron's nerves were at an all time high. He met with this OL group and began to feel more relaxed. He realized that he was finally free from his father's oppressive reign. He said his goodbyes with his family and began his life as a college student.
Cameron went out with his friends his first weekend at Emory. His friends asked if he wanted to drink. Cameron was shocked and felt pressured. It was his time to start over and he wanted to be accepted more than anything. He starts drinking and refuses to stop. He is motivated to prove that he is "fun."
Cameron wakes up the next morning and does not remember a thing. His friends come to his room and rave about how cool he was the previous night. Cameron feels jubilant. His friend John pleads for him to go out again and Cameron acquiesces. This slowly turns into a habit for the gregarious Cameron.
Initially Cameron finds nothing wrong with this behavior until his midterms are graded. He failed all five. He tries to remain calm. He assumes his friends are dealing with the same problem but he could not be further from the truth. He begins to realize that he is the only person in his group of friends that can never say no. He is embarrassed and disappointed. He thinks of his parents and feels tremendously selfish.
Cameron decides to get focused and learn to say no. His efforts prove beneficial. His grades slowly begin to climb. He realizes that his friends still treat him the same and being responsible does not tarnish his reputation. Cameron has finally found the beautiful balance of college and he could not be happier.
I really like the story. I feel that this story can/is a very realistic story for many college students at any university. You also might want to put a big emphasis on the ending and see how Cameron regains decent grades.
As a college freshman who has not yet decided on a major, I would like to use my film to depict the stress and frustration that comes with being undecided. My movie begins with alternating shots of two lost Emory freshmen, Shane and Greg, who are trying to find their way back to their dorm rooms in Harris Hall. Both students struggle to read the campus map and shortly run into each other, literally.
Shane and Greg decide to work together in their quest to find Harris Hall. As they walk together and converse, they begin to relate to each other’s struggle of having undecided majors. Shane and Greg share their frustrations and anxiousness to have a concrete, academic path. Furthermore, because they both have poor senses of direction, the students continue to get lost and find themselves entering the wrong buildings. Upon accidentally entering the modern language building, Shane serendipitously meets a linguistics professor in a casual language workshop and makes an instant connection with her. Both of his parents are bilingual and he’s always had an interest in languages, but he never even realized that Emory offers linguistics as a major. At that moment, Shane unofficially declares himself a linguistics major.
The freshman leave the modern language building and continue their search for Harris Hall. At this point, not only is Greg frustrated that he is undecided and lost on campus, but he is also jealous of Shane’s luck in finding a suitable major. Fortunately for Greg, when he and Shane amble into the music building at Emory, Greg recalls his love and passion for the piano and trumpet and ventures into the orchestra room where students are playing instruments. He confidently walks to the piano and begins playing the keys in perfect accord with the other instruments. After only a couple seconds of listening, the head of the music department calls Greg over and convinces him to major in music.
Satisfied and thrilled with their recent academic choices, Greg and Shane then decide to go on a celebratory walk around campus. As they walk about the campus, without a map this time, they stumble upon Harris Hall. As the freshmen walk up to the front door, Shane says to Greg, “You know Shane, we really had nothing to worry about. Everything always works out in the end.”
I really like your idea since its relatable and most of the freshman are going through the struggle of figuring out their major.I don't know if you have already thought about it but Its just a suggestion if you wanted to use humor to depict the two characters in the movie as they struggle to figure out what they want to major in.
I think this is a really cool issue that many of the undergraduate population can relate to. I like what you have!
I like this idea because of its relatability. Many freshmen, including myself, don't know exactly what they want to do yet and are waiting for the moment they figure it out. I like the quote at the end where Greg says, "Everything always works out in the end." This would be a great comedy.
I want to make this movie because the stacks of the woodruff are so creepy sometimes, so I want to utilize that creepy, intense space that’s really hard to come by.
The movie is very creepy with a hint of a comedic tone. It starts off in the stacks of the Woodruff. Creepy Music. A guy sits across a girl studying in the cubicles. He secretly reaches down and touches her leg and then licks his finger. The camera zooms in a creepy smile. The girl leaves to get a coffee. He follows her to spy on her. The camera shoots angles of him peaking out behind different backgrounds as he follows her down the coffee shot. She drinks some coffee, spits it out because its too hot onto a napkin. He takes the napkin and then follows her home all the way until she gets into the doorway ad then he says casually “goodnight, blah”. The next day his roommate walks in on stalker sobbing uncontrollably but he doesn’t want to talk about it. The roommate then walks in on the shrine. Roommate decides the stalker needs help. Motivational music comes on as they sit up and create a plan. Drinking coffee, scribbling on paper, etc. They go to the library the next day and they find her on the first floor. The roommate goes up her and introduces himself. While doing so the stalker ties the girls shoelaces together. Then the roommate takes the girls purse and runs off. The girl follows and trips due to her tied shoe laces but the stalker, who’s hair is combed and wearing a blazer and a flower in his pocket, dives in and catches her. He puts her down and runs, tackles the roommate and pretends to beat him up. At one point they pause for a second and wink and each other. The stalker gets the purse, and returns it to the girl. Ends with the roommate winking.
I like the plot twist and how the roommate helps the stalker by making him seem impressive in front of the girl. It's a unique idea.
I love this idea of a film. Very creative. I think that the ending could be a bit better. Since you are playing against the typical predictable action, you can try having the "stalker" "save" the girl, yet the girl falls for the "thief" ironically.
I want to present a fact that students whose first language is not English can have really hard time adjusting themselves to the current lives so they have to push themselves. The reason why I was motivated to write this script is that I sometimes feel the same way as the main character in it does.
“Just say something”.The story begins with a Chinese girl named as Alex sitting among three American students and listening to them silently. They are meeting to make the outline for a health-related project.
When Alex receives the texts about the meeting, she is nervous but excited to meet everybody outside the class. When she arrives at the meeting spot, a girl named Katie is here and says hi to Alex. After they ask each other about how they are doing recently, they begin to play with their own cellphones in silence. Then the other two, Kevin and Sherry come and they start to discuss about the project. At first Alex feels fine to listen and is able to say a few words, but as time goes by she feels she can’t keep up because when the others throw a topic, she is always a bit behind since she needs more time to process what they are talking about and organize what to say. She thinks to herself that during the next meeting she is definitely going to make a try.
However during the second meeting, Alex is still not talking. What’s worse is that she is afraid of speaking out her thoughts even when she actually has a good one. She fears that she may be mocked if she can’t talk clearly or may make mistakes. Whenever she thinks about cutting in and expressing her ideas, she will imagine the scene that she can’t express herself well and other people are laughing at her.
“Scene of Imagination”: Alex is talking but misusing words occasionally and even using gestures to try to make herself understood. Then there are people laughing or whispering about her. (Focus on everybody’s face and gesture of laughing and whispering around.) “I’m just embarrassing myself.” She stops talking.
Alex’s roommate, Lacey, an outgoing and friendly girl from Oregon, sees her upset and asks why. Alex then tells Lacey about her concern. Her roommate says it’s alright sometimes for people to make mistakes or even be made fun of that. “What you need to do is just tell others your true ideas and can talk slowly at first. But you have to say something instead of just listening and watching others talk.” Lacey says sincerely.
At the next meeting, Alex thinks about what Lacey tells her and asks Katie, Kevin and Sherry if they could hear her thoughts and then make decisions. Surprisingly they all are glad to know what she is thinking about. “You know I always want everybody in the group to come up with an idea. We are actually waiting for you to say something.”Katie says and laughs kindly. That reminds of what Lacey says, “Just say something. You’ll be fine.”
Alex feels awesome that day and decides to join in the discussion actively from now.
I like your story because sometimes I feel the same way as Alex in the pitch. However, I think it will be hard to picture all those inner thought of Alex. I also think it will also be not so interesting if the story focuses only on Alex's mind struggles because it will be hard for most of the audience to feel the same way as Alex. Also, the turning point in the last part of the story is a little dramatic.
For Alex's inner thoughts, the fear part I am thinking about the scenes of imaginations, that is a special scene derived from Alex's imaginations.
I think many people may somehow have similar feelings because almost everyone is afraid of making mistakes and being made fun of.
Actually it needs more time for Alex to finally talk but since it's a short movie so I'm trying to find a way to make it look more logical.
I really enjoy this topic, especially because it raises a point of view that I don't think many would take the time to put into consideration when in situations like the one listed above. Similar to what Xueyin said, however, I think it will be hard to convey Alex's mental thoughts and feelings while shooting physical scenes.
I want to make a film about the freshman 15, because it is a common and relatable issue faced by freshmen in colleges everywhere. Although everyone may not gain the dreaded freshman 15, the fear and anxiety of it has crossed everyone’s mind at least once since they’ve arrived on campus. My film tells the story of one main character, Jane, and her worst fears of gaining the freshman 15 becoming a reality.
The first scene in my film will have a close up shot of empty junk food wrappers scattered across the floor. The sound of chip bags rustling and someone eating will be evident as the initial credits roll. Then the camera slowly pans out to include Amy, who is on the floor with their laptop, eating. The roommate comes in asking where the potato chips are. Amy sheepishly apologizes for eating all of it and the rest of the Oreos. The roommate then ominously warns the main character, “Watch out for that freshman 15.Once you’ve got it, it’s hard to go back.” Amy, who appears tired, does not take the warning seriously and eventually drifts to sleep.
The middle of the film begins with the character waking up and rushing to class, going about her day. As the day goes on, the film highlights the character continuing to make unhealthy choices such as taking the elevator all the time, sleeping extremely late, and going out for late night meals with friends. There will also be a specific scene where the main character piles food onto their tray at the DUC and receiving strange looks from people passing by. The most important aspect of the middle of this film is the camera shots being taken. When the camera captures the main character directly, he/she seems normal in appearance. However when the character is walking past a mirror or glass door or window, the camera will show a shot where character gains obvious weight. The weight increases with each passing scene. At the climax of the film, the main character will stand in front of a mirror and finally see the weight they’ve gain, which will be extremely exaggerated.
The film wraps up with the main character jolting awake letting the audience know that the past few scenes were only a dream. However the main character is clearly affected by their dream. He/she hurriedly throws away all the empty junk food containers and rushes out the door. The film ends showing quick shots of the main character taking the stairs, showing more caution at the DUC, sleeping earlier, and exiting the gym.
Yen, I love how detailed the beginning was! It was easy to visualize so I know you have a clear idea how you will execute it. The freshmen 15 is definitely something I know myself and a lot of other freshmen stress about so that is a really great idea.
I really liked the topic and the fact that we are working on the same topic! Also, the climax idea sounds really good. I think you'll have to execute the dream scene very well to make it more effective.
I like how relatable this idea is for everyone in the class. I also like how you had slow falling action. It seems very well-planned!
From my own experience, and from what I have heard and observed from other freshman here at Emory, one struggle or conflict that students have is balancing new friends they have made here and also keeping in touch with old friends from home. College is a time of huge transition. Students are branching out in many ways. They are leaving home, living on their own for the first time. Also, they are now attending a new school, with new teachers, and much higher expectations. One of the greatest struggles for students is leaving behind the friends that have been such a huge part of their life up until now. Balancing new and old friends can be a challenge. Especially when communicating with old friends that are at far away distances and are also going through a time of extreme transition. As everyone settles into their new homes and schools, relationships can change and it can be hard to remain as close as you once were. My film is going to focus around this idea of struggling to maintain old friendships, while adjusting into life at college and the affects that this can have on students. My story will focus around a main character, Molly, who has just arrived at college. As she settles into her dorm room, she is continuously sending pictures to her two best friends from home. Her first night, she talks to them on the phone for an hour giving detailed descriptions of everything she has done so far and all the people she has met. But as she begins to make new friends at school, she starts spending all of her time with them. The calls become scarce and she texts with her friends in between classes or when she finds time in the evenings. The conversations are mostly small talk though, consisting of basic questions on how their classes are, or their roommates, or how the weather is there. Molly is enjoying herself immensely, but she starts to worry that her friendships are fading away. She doesn’t really know how her friends are doing and what they are doing for fun or whom they hang out with. As she begins to worry more, she starts to wonder what it will be like to see them again. Will it be awkward? Will it feel like it did before? Or will things be different now that they have all moved on and started different lives. But when Molly goes home for Fall Break, she is reunited with her best friends. Despite her worries, it is as if nothing has changed. They pick up right where they left off and she has a great time. She realizes, that even though things are different and their relationship may not be the same with talking every day, they are still able to catch up on breaks and have fun. Relationships may change, but they are not gone and while she has new friends at school, her lifetime friends will always be an important part of her life.
I really like the message of your story, especially with a happy ending. I' m sure most freshmen at Emory can relate to this story. You may want to put a lot of stress on the ending and how they reunite and "pick up right where they left off" because you could really use it to your advantage when you try concluding your story.
I want to make this movie to show the contrast in the mode of communication in today’s generation to that in the olden times when social networking sites were not heard of. Also I wanted to highlight that today’s generation is living in a bubble that needs to be popped so they can look beyond the trivial problems they have like how many friends liked their picture on Facebook.
Sara, Elena, Harry and Colin are sitting at the DUC eating breakfast. Even though they are all physically together they are busy texting or snap chatting on their phone. Suddenly Elena looks up and says that’s weird my grand mom just texted me saying accept my friend request on Facebook. That’s when Sara thinks aloud about what life was like during the time when the mobile phones and laptops were as commonly used as they are now. Collin gets an idea and challenges himself as well as everyone else on the table to not use any gadget for 24 hours.
As the day progresses they are all start getting withdrawal symptoms. Sara says, “I haven’t checked Facebook for three hours. I feel I the world’s coming to an end.” Harry says, “I feel the same way I haven’t tweeted my friends for so long I am afraid my friends might think I am dead.” They then go for lunch where they have an awkward conversation since they don’t have anything to talk about. That’s when Sara realizes that their entire life revolved around their phone and they needed to change that. So they being making plans that would distract them from thinking about how they don’t have their phone. So they decide to go to the lull water park for a stroll. To their surprise they actually have a good time and they end up sitting next to the lake for a couple of hour chatting up about their lives.
Finally the end scene is that the four of them are sitting at the DUC to have dinner. The camera focuses on all their phones stacked up on the table and them having an actual conversation with their friends rather than them texting on the phone.
I like the topic you chose since it is an eye opener for our communication problems in modern society. I enjoyed the different shots you used in composing your pitch. I would add more dialogue to make it a bit more interesting though.
I love your topic! It's so creative and it definitely is a pressing issue. Maybe you can go into depth with the "withdrawal symptoms" that show external influences that make them tempted to use their phones. For example you have have friends go up to them and ask "Dude why havent you been messaging me back" or a girl giving a guy her instagram name. Overall really cool idea!!
Great idea. Not only does this provide entertainment and poke fun at us and our generation, but it is also a real issue with us. We don't know how to communicate verbally or in person because of the new technologies. Maybe for the ending, you can have them having an actual conversation at the DUC, and then as they leave, they all update their twitter/facebook/etc about what an awesome time they had.
I want to make a short film about the care and encouragement given by a stranger. This is a story about a college girl who always finds a note with encouraging words left by someone on her desk when she is overwhelmed by her workload in the library. And those words on the anonymous note indeed really encourage her and give her more confidence and energy to do her work. So she tries to find the person who always leaves a note to her... The idea of the film is drawn from a real experience of receiving an anonymous note from a person unknown, but the story in the film is an expanded version. It goes far beyond the real experience. And the main point I want to express in the film is care is all round. Some little things of kindness you do for others will encourage and help them a lot. Let’s be caring and friendly!
First scene: In the woodruff library, Jane is struggling with her phycology readings and paper. A close-up of Jane: she knits the brows and scratches her head. And then she decides to get some tap water and takes a short break. ( A full length shot here to picture how she tries to relax her mind tin an attempt to continue her homework.)
When she comes back to her stack and sits down, she finds a note sticker on her desk. A close-up of the note: “Be as vigorous as the sunshine outside! You can do it! :)” There is no signature on the note, but a mark written on the lower right conner--radiant lines in a triangle which is encircled in an oval. Jane looks around, trying to find who has left the note on her desk, but everybody around her is just concentrating on his own work as he was previously. Jane picks up the note on the desk and looks at the words on the note. A close-up of Jane: A beam of sunlight falls on the smiling face of Jane through the window. And then Jane sits down and works on her readings and paper with energy and confidence.
Second scene: It’s one o’clock at night. And Jane is still studying for her Econ mid-term tomorrow in the library. And she just feels very tired and decides to have a cat nap at her desk. When she wakes up, she sees a note sticker on her desk. “ Prepare better, exam better! You will do well in your exam!” These are the words appeared on the note. And again the same mark on the lower right corner of the note, just like a signature. Jane looks around. Again there’s no one walking away from her desk. Everyone is doing his own work on his desk. She sits down and looks at the note on her desk. And she just feel warm and encouraged by the words on the note. Also, she is more curious about the person leaving notes to her... And later a shot to the grade of her exam: A...
Third scene: Jane is on her PACE class. She is looking at the screen in the front. Suddenly, she glimpsed the man sitting in front of her drawing the mark which is the same as the one appeared on the notes. She is very excited and wants to chat him up. So she says “hi” to the man sitting in front of her and says” I really like the mark you are drawing. It’s...s quite artistic, I think. Er, is there any meaning of it?” The man is a little bit surprised and replies to her, “actually, I just saw my deskmate in my sociology class always drawing this mark. So now I’m drawing this mark, too! I don’t know what’s the meaning, sorry!” “ That’s ok. Thank you!” Jane smiled awkwardly and feel a little upset.
Fourth scene: Jane is doing her work in library. Then she stands up and goes to the restroom. When she comes out of the restroom, she sees a man leaving a note on her desk and walking away form the desk with his back to her. So she walks quickly towards him and tries to call him. However, she just hits a guy who walks by side and bumps the books off his hands. She says sorry to the guy and stoops to pick up the books. And at the same time, hearing the noises behind, the man who has left a note to Jane turns around while Jane raises her head. And both of them look at each other and smile...
Fifth scene: some words appearing on the screen sentence by sentence: Care is all round. Some little things of kindness you do for others will encourage and help them a lot. Let’s be caring and friendly! May life be full with care and love.
Sixth scene: At Jazzman’s, the man asks Jane,” can I buy you a coffee?”
I think this is such a cute story! You should go with it!
My inspiration for this movie are my personal experiences. Though what is going on in my life is not as dramatic as the events I will portray in the movie, I think that dramatizing will make for a far more enjoyable viewing experience for the audience. I would like to make a movie about the struggles of a main character who is a first-year college student (Johnny) that goes off to college far away from home, but wants to continue to uphold relationships back home. I will start the movie off with a scene (April 2013) where the Johnny is excited about getting into Emory University not only because it is a great school, but also because he will be able to get far away from the hometown that he is so sick and tired of. I will then show a scene (August 2013) where Johnny is about to take off for college but looks depressed and is going through a mental struggle in which he regrets choosing a school so far from home. He and his close friends are pictured promising each other that they will stay in contact and will not let their relationships fade away. He reminisces about how much stronger his relationships with his friends had grown over the summer (seemingly such a short time) and how he wishes he didn’t have to leave those people behind (accompanied by flashbacks of having many great times with those people). The mental struggle continues while Johnny is pictured arriving at college. Everyone around him seems to be having a great time making new friends. Though he socializes with those around him, he doesn’t feel that he can be friends with any of the new people. He also can’t help but wonder whether or not he will be able to uphold his relationships back home now that everything has become so real. As time goes by, Johnny is pictured being busy with student orientation and classes. He is overwhelmed by all of his responsibilities and has difficulty finding time to talk to his friends back home. When he does talk to friends back home, new people around him ask him to go out with them. Johnny has difficulty figuring out how to balance his old and new relationships. By choosing to talk to his friends at home rather than going out with new people, Johnny compromises his ability to form new relationships, which leads to negative emotional repercussions. Eventually, Johnny figures out how he can make new friends and maintain his older relationships. He decides to spend one half of his time talking to old friends and the other half on making new friends. ENDING: This proves to be a very good way to go about the situation. Johnny hangs out with new people and therefore has many new things to talk about with his old friends. As a result, Johnny makes new friends at Emory and also strengthens his old relationships back home. ...ALTERNATIVE ENDING: Johnny spends so much time with new people that he compromises his old relationships. He no longer enjoys talking to people who are so far away from him and decides to stick only to his new friends. Johnny is happy, but his old friends feel mistreated.
I really like your topic! I believe most of us can relate to it very easily. The one thing I want to ask is that how are you going to display the mental struggle that Johnny is going through? Dialogues between him and his frends making promises? It might be a bit hard to display his mental struggle without verbal communication.
I want to make a film about Freshman 15 and meal plans in general and how they can mess up a college freshman’s academic and daily life. I think that’s something we can all more or less relate after starting college since I believe most of us changed our eating habits.
Adam is a college freshman at Emory trying to adapt to the elements of college life. It seems overwhelming at first and he does not really know what to do with everything going on around him. He has to study, do his own laundry, and stay healthy on his own. He realizes that he has now lots of responsibilities. With the mid-terms coming up, he cannot simply bare all this pressure and starts to eat way more than usual. For him food is the way to escape from everything, he loves food at Duc and Cox. Whenever he is stressed out, he decides to eat. Whether it’s going to DUC, COX, Zayas or simply eating other things he got from CVS he doesn’t mind. A chain of events starting with eating too much leads to an unpredictable catastrophe resulting in failing a midterm and other significant undesired issues.
The movie starts with him studying in a study lounge. He eats his nails while studying. This shows his stress and anxiety about everything that concerns him. This first scene is followed by other short scenes showing him eating lots of food at different places and paying by swiping his Emory card. Short close-ups to the receipts of his Emory card balance decreasing continuously. Next day, he has to study for his big mid-term that he has on the following day. After he does his laundry with the last 1.50$ left in his Emory card, he goes to library to print his assignment that is also due the following day. Nevertheless, he cannot print his document because he has no money left on his Emory card. He tries not to be too discouraged and goes back to his dorm. When he picks up his laundry, he sees nothing but his white shirts turned into pink. He had put them into the same washing machine with colored clothes because his balance did not allow him to do two separate laundries. He becomes devastated and depressed. This is when he hits his all-time low. He decides to go to zayas to forget about his laundry at 11pm. The day ends with a close up of him standing in front of the mirror with a pillow under his shirt. (Exaggeration of his freshman 15)
After he fails his mid-term, he has enough and makes his mind to go to the gym no matter what happens. On his way to the gym, people pass by talking about food, duc, how hungry they are etc. “Ahh, I’m so hungry... I’m gonna eat the DUC..” “I’m starving.. “ “here do you want chips?” -people eating junk food. This is supposed to be the climax.
An immense struggle is to be highlighted here. In the end, he makes his way to the gym and starts running. The only thing I am not sure of is whether I can fit all this in 5 minutes.
I want to make my movie about a zombie apocalypse at Emory. My inspiration arose from my love of horror movies coupled with my best friend’s contagious obsession with zombies. Even better, I recently learned that Emory is right next door to the Center for Disease Control (CDC), making Emory the prime location to be attacked if there ever was a zombie apocalypse. I think that this would be a very fun film to shoot since it would entail the creativity of zombie makeup and acting. Every good zombie story includes a theory of how the epidemic broke out. My story centers on a formula that was developed by a mad scientist working in the CDC. The scientist is fueled by grandiose delusions of being omnipotent, which is an actual mental illness. His ultimate plan is to create a zombie army and cleanse the Earth of its inhabitants, starting with the areas in and around Emory. Basically the formula not only prompts an autoimmune disease giving the infected zombie-like qualities, but also alters the mind, switching off the part of the brain where humanity and morality stem from in my story. The result is an army of smarter-than-your-average-zombies. From here, the movie can take one of two directions. The first would be to focus the film around the initial outbreak of the epidemic spreading from the CDC to the Emory community. The second approach would be to have the zombie outbreak already happen and focus the short film around the characters’ general survival at Emory and their lifestyle during the hard times. In both cases, the main protagonists would be a group of around four or five students, with one cast as the story’s narrator. The ending of the short film would be tragic, of course, with all the main characters taken out in the end. However, this is only after a climactic battle between the mad scientist and the rest of the resistance, resulting in the demise of the antagonist. The zombies win in the end due to pure numbers and ruthless energy.
So this is what I came up with so far, do any of you have suggestions as to where my story can go/ how to improve it? Also which of the two routes should it take?
The movie will end as follows:
(static -- radio talking) "... I'm the last of us --static-- I feel it in my bones. It's a matter of -- loud noise from afar-- no! please" -- loud static, zombie noises, static-- Silence.
My movie is about drinking in college, especially due to peer pressure. Because I do have some friends who had trouble before and I believe it’s a problem that everyone should be aware of.
In the beginning of the story, Stephanie, who has just survived the midterm week, asks Mary to go to the frat row with their friends together. Mary is a little bit tired, but since Stephanie is her best friend in college and all her other friends are going, she doesn’t want to reject them. So then she agrees, though not that willingly. Before they go, they pregame heavily. One of Mary’s friends, Tom, keeps giving liquor to Mary and gets her really drunk.
At the party, they dance and have fun at first. But soon, Mary suddenly vomits on a girl. People and brothers kick Mary out.
It’s already 2 am. Mary, with the help of Stephanie, gets back to dorm. Mary starts talking, so loudly that wakes Lindsey, her roommate, and a lot of people on that floor up. Mary is really angry at Tom because he gets her so drunk. Meanwhile, she also feels really sorry for the girl she vomits on earlier. “I’m so sorry. I’m so sorry.” Mary starts crying, “How can Tom do this to me? Why did he get me so freaking drunk?” Then she goes to Lindsey’s bed and says, “I feel so sorry Lindsey I woke you up. I know the roommate contracts and I'm not supposed to come back this late but I’m just too drunk.”
She keeps saying and crying for an hour. “Don’t worry Mary. It’s OK. Everyone is here to help.” Lindsey gets off her bed and hands Mary a glass of water. Stephanie, who only has some beer, is pretty much sober. She hugs Mary and pats her on the shoulder, telling her that not to go to the frat parties and drink too much alcohol because of peer pressure. “Be yourself, Mary.”
The next morning, Mary sobers up completely. She recalls everything happened the night before. She says to Lindsey and her friends, “I’m so sorry about last night but trust me guys: I’m so determined. I won’t go to the frat row for a really long time and I will never ever drink so much again. I promise.”
Throughout the rest of the semester, Mary keeps her promise and doesn’t go to any frat parties. She also makes a lot of friends, through actively involving herself in club activities and other meaningful social events, rather than frats.
I want to make this movie because college relationships do not always go as planned. One person does not always have the same intentions as the other person. The movie will start off with the boy waking up. The first thing he does is text both of the girls he has recently been seeing “Morning babe.” He gets up, gets ready, and leaves for class. Girl #1 wakes up from the vibration of her phone. She checks the text and smiles. She goes back to sleep. The next scene starts with the boy waiting for girl #2 outside of class. He kindly walks her back to her dorm. The rest of the film basically shows the balance he tries to make with his time to be with two girls at once. Neither girl has any idea that he is seeing the other girl. He takes one on a date one night and the other another night. One day he is hanging out with one of his friends in his room playing Xbox. He accidentally call girl #1 without realizing. He is telling his friend how slick he is. “Yeah it’s amazing, neither girl has ANY idea. I think I’m totally getting away with it. There’s no way I’ll ever get caught” the boy says. “I’d be careful. You wouldn’t want this to turn into a huge mess” his friend responds. “Both of the girls are way to oblivious to ever notice. I’m golden bro don’t worry” the boy says. On the other size of the phone girl #1 goes into shock. The camera zooms up on her face as if she is frozen and then she breaks down crying. They finish playing, the boy grabs his phone and they exit the room. Girl #1 and girl #2 walk to class, separately. They take seats next to one another and start making small talk. The professor assigns a project where they have to work in groups of two. They decide to be partners and that they’ll meet after class. They walk to girl #2’s room and start planning their project. Girl #1’s phone starts ringing and it’s the boy. “Hi (his name) I can’t talk I am doing a project we’ll meet up later” she says. Girl #2 thinks nothing of it. There are TONS of people with the name (his name) at the school. The boy walks to girl #2’s room not knowing who is in the room. He knocks on the door and she opens it. Girl #1 and the boy make eye contact. “What are you doing here?” she says. Girl #2 goes “Oh this is my boyfriend (his name), (his name) meet girl #1.” “This must be a joke. He is MY boyfriend” she storms out. “Leave” girl #2 says. “I can explain” he responds. “LEAVE I SAID!”
Not sure how I want to end it, but if anyone has a good idea please feel free to share! Thanks!!!
I enjoyed reading the synopsis! I think it's a fun and relatable plot, and would result in an entertaining short film. I'm not exactly sure how you could end it, but I think you have a really strong start to everything!
The reason I want to make this movie is to make Christians in college or any level of school understand that praying to God is not enough, they need to also have faith and believe in what they're praying for and also put maximum effort into their work.
The movie would be about 2 friends Michael and Josh who just started college and are roommates. They are both Christians but Josh is more religious. Josh takes a lot of more of his time to study and is very organized while Michael studies only about once a week spending more of his time hanging out with friends.
Michael is pre-med so he's taking courses like chemistry and biology while Josh is pre-business so he's taking economics and calc. After 3 weeks they both have tests on every subject. Michael, realizing he has these tests didn't go out on the previous weekend spending all the time reading and trying to catch up on all his courses meanwhile Josh who has been constantly studying prepares lightly for his tests on the weekend. The week after the tests the results were out. Josh got all A's on his test while Michael struggled with C's. Michael comes back to the room looking disgruntled and annoyed and Josh concerned asks him what the matter was. Michael tells him that he didn't do well on his tests and got C’s. Michael feels that Josh’s courses are easy and that’s why he was able to do well in them. Josh tries to tell him to pray before he takes any test, study more and believe he can actually do well in them.
For the next exams Michael still waits till the last minute to study. But this time he prays before the exam and hopes that he does well this time. He feels optimistic this time. When the results come out, Michael fairly passes with B’s and was not still happy with it. He feels discouraged and starts to disbelief in the prayers but Josh still tries to persuade him to keep on with it but also put more effort into studying. He listens and then in the next exams he eventually gets what he wanted.
This short film is currently untitled, but I am thinking of potential names for it. I want to make it because I think it’s fun, playful, and engaging, and it is simple enough to tell a complete story in a five-minute time frame. I took film classes for two years in high school, and made many film pieces, covering all aspects of filmmaking. I think my experience would be an advantage in the making of this project, and it would result in a very entertaining and well-made short film.
The film begins as a man wakes up in the morning, wondering what he is going to wear. His name is Connor, and he is trying to prepare for a typical school day. He takes a shower and begins to get ready for school. This is where he finds his dilemma: he doesn’t know what clothes he should wear! His closet is overflowing with shirts and shorts and pants and shoes. While he never had a stylist, he knows what looks good and what doesn’t. Even so, he just can’t decide what he should sport for the day. He imagines himself wearing different outfits. Each outfit results in a short dreamlike sequence onscreen. In every vision, something bad happens to Connor, so he puts those outfits back in the closet, and forgets about them. Finally, he comes across an outfit that he envisions will result in a good day. He excitedly chooses to wear those clothes, and goes off to school. Unfortunately, the exact opposite of what he envisioned happens to him. Connor learns the lesson that he can choose his fashion, but he cannot choose his fate. The screen fades to black, and the film ends.
Potential Visions/Daydream Sequences
- Getting a bad grade
- Breakup text from girlfriend
- Losing a Twitter or Instagram follower
- Getting hit in the head with a ball or Frisbee, knocked out
- Dropping his tray in the cafeteria
- Tripping over his shoelace in front of a cute girl
I really like your idea. I picture the visions and daydream sequences featured in your film as mini-movies within the film itself and find it to be very creative.
My film idea is inspired by my stay at Emory Campus over the fall break. Since the DUC and every other eating facility was closed, the unlucky few of us were forced to choose between starvation and desperate snacking. Surviving on one large take-out meal and massive amounts of candy-like snacks per day began to take its toll on both our digestive systems and mental abilities. This minor struggle was only shared by those who remained, and when any one of us attempted to describe the difficulty we had attempting to maintain a healthy diet to a peer, our tale would be met with a failed attempt at commiseration and several despaired sighs. It is with this interaction between those who left and those who stayed that I want to explore. The film would begin with a roommate returning to his room after the break only to find his room in a disheveled state, (discarded boxes, clothing strewn everywhere, chairs overturned, etc.) with his roommate living in a near savage state. As the returnee asks what in the world happened while he was gone, the roommate who stayed begins to tell the story. (Fade from scene to scene). He begins by saying that during the first hours of the break, everyone underestimated the difficulty they would have of finding free and good food. Hubris prevailed then, but it would soon come to destroy those who wielded it. (CUT: where over-confident students are saying they do not need to eat) Soon, as people realized that not only could they not get 5 meals at the DUC, but also the midnight snack at Woodruff and the 3AM meal at Zayas were unavailable.(CUT: panic sets onto the crowd) The roommate then goes on to tell his roommate several, increasingly preposterous stories of how their mutual friends managed, or failed, to make it through the break. (CUT TO): One student, in a Gandi-esque fashion decided to meditate his way through the hunger, and reach nirvana. (CUT TO): Another decided that his athletic figure was not worth saving, and gained massive amount of weight by constantly eating junk food. (CUT TO): The roommate then goes on to explain that many students formed tribes, which at first lived peacefully scavenging in Lullwater, Emory restaurant dumpsters, and friends’ fridges. However, their coexistence devolved as competition increased and the amount of food decreased. The campus was overrun and is not divided into several territories which are controlled by the several student tribes. (Show map of divided campus) Horrified, the returned roommate asks how the roommate managed to survive. The savage roommate nonchalantly pulls out dozens of Dominos boxes and frankly claims that he ordered in.
I want to make this movie because many people don't get the same experience living in a freshman dorm as I get. As it is, Turman is a special place because it is so small, so it is a very tight-knit community. The fifth floor, however, is a family. Everybody on the floor knows everybody and we may not be the best of friends, but we definitely have something special going on on "T5".
My idea for my film was to document about the lives of the residents of my floor. More specifically, the lives of two guys whose lives were completely turned upside-down, starting with their decision to come to Emory. Both of them are from Germany, however neither of them are German. One (Justin) lived there because his parents were based their on military duty. The other - Keywan (KAY-vahn) - only lives there because he can not live in his home country of Iran because of all the turmoil in the Middle East. Both of them are used to the German school system, and German life overall. This includes: going to school, watching Formula One, and playing soccer; never really hanging out with friends from school too often.
When Justin and Keywan moved to the United States to come to school at Emory, they had no idea what was in store for them. Little did they know that things would be very different from back home - good and bad. "I don't think we're in Kansas anymore."
The movie begins with Justin and Keywan on move-in day. They are meeting each other for the first time. That person that they are meting would be their roommate, but so much more than that. They would be brothers, best friends, class mates, study buddies, and mentors. As they are moving their belongings into their new home, they do not notice anything strange. They were standing in a room full of people from Germany; why would things be strange yet?
But then they start to get distracted. Way too many things are going on for them to not participate in. Pretty soon, they are doing way too many things, spending all of their money, and have no work done and are failing their classes.
There are many issues that college students face during their transition to a more independent lifestyle—one being the freshman fifteen. The term is often joked about, yet I know of many people who are worried about gaining weigh and struggle to resist the unlimited supply of food at the DUC. For my movie, I want to portray this struggle in a comedic way that ridicules the issue but also shows the impact it has on the lives of students. My movie will be about a student named Hannah who arrives to college excited and ready to explore her newly achieved freedom. One of the best things about college for her so far is the food, especially the chocolate chip cookies and ice cream machine at the DUC. As she makes friends, they begin to gather at the cafeteria and the statement the text messages “DUC in 10?” and “Wanna go to the DUC?” are quite common. When her school workload increases, she begins to stress eat even more, indulges in midnight snacks, and makes poor dietary choices. Weeks go by and Hannah starts noticing a change in her body. She becomes self-conscious and avoids mirrors in denial. The physical changes continue, however, and she feels sluggish and sleeps too much from lack of nutrition—ultimately affecting her mind and schoolwork. One day, Hannah picks up a cookie and the food morphs into a face saying, “Eat me!” and “Don’t eat me!” These voices show her internal struggle of knowing something is wrong but being unable to make a change. The same battle of her conscience occurs when she is getting ready for school one day and her pants barely fit. She looks in the mirror and hears conflicting voices encouraging her to change saying, “Go to the gym, fatty!” and “You’re beautiful just the way you are!” After a brief state of depression, the pivotal part of the movie occurs: Hannah decides to change her lifestyle. She begins to exercise every day and eat healthier, more balanced meals. Weeks of hard work later, Hannah loses the weight she had gained and becomes a fitter and happier person. She even scores herself a date with a hot soccer guy she meets at the gym in the end of the movie. The last scene is her walking off with the guy for the night feeling confident and like a new woman.
Inspired by the freshman orientation’s skit of the stereotypes and discriminations, I want to write a story about a freshman going into Emory that is a very discriminating/racist person. I want a more comical spin to it with the classic ending of a lesson that we should accept the people as they are and not as we portray them to be.
The film will begin from the student’s point-of-view, as if the camera was the lens of the student (let’s just call this student Sophie). Sophie is walking down the street to her first class in Callaway from her dorm. As she’s walking, there will be a voice-over of all the racist or discriminating thoughts weaving through her mind. As she arrives to class, she realizes there are a large variety of people with different backgrounds. She glances around each person and sighs. The professor tells everyone to try ice breakers to begin the first week of class. Everyone is playing games and introducing themselves to each other. As Sophie is introducing herself, a scenario of how the stereotypical introduction would go, and then the actual introduction happens. After going through about every race or stereotype, she goes back to her dorm and thinks. She is talking aloud about her experience with so many people that she is unfamiliar with and how none of the students followed the stereotype she perceived. Several weeks have passed and there is a shot of Sophie with a group of students with different backgrounds. She is actually making friends and she notices. We are back in her thoughts and while she’s enjoying her company, she is talking about how she realizes just because a person’s skin isn’t the same color as hers, or a person isn’t from the same place as hers, doesn’t mean they’re weird. Instead, she should refrain from judging and actually get to know the students she is surrounding herself with.
This is a far-fetched idea and I’m afraid it might offend people at first so I’m not sure if this will be a good idea but it was a thought.
I derived inspiration for this movie script from my personal experience. Coming to the States for college after spending a majority of my life abroad, I underwent many unfamiliar but interesting experience rooming with a student who is very different from me. Although I went to an international school taught in American pedagogics, my experience outside the school revolved around Korean lifestyle. After coming to Emory, I encountered a new type of “culture shock” - different food, lifestyle, and outlook. The movie “Different People on the Same Boat” occurs over the span of early college life. Chris gets into Emory University, his dream school. He lives in Shanghai, China and has been raised by a Korean household his whole life. Kirby, on the other hand, comes from an ordinary White family in Massachusetts. Kirby has never left the state his entire life and is looking for a different experience in college. Chris and Kirby meet online, and they agree to room together for the freshman year. On the move-in day, the roommates converse about their lifestyles and find out how different they are. Chris is not used to the school food just yet, and longs for authentic comfort food. They also find out that have different lifestyles. While amused, Chris and Kirby, who are both Economics majors, know that they are on the same boat when it comes to their academic pursuit. Despite the cultural differences they hold, their passion and purpose are similar - being able to fulfil their dreams in college.
This was a spring 2015 forum. We mostly used our Facebook group for discussion forum.